User talk:Angelah24/Early pregnancy bleeding/Mikaroni888 Peer Review

I (Michelle Luu/Mikaroni888) am reviewing sections 2 and 3.

Pathophysiology: - Good overview, but I felt like there was a good amount of jargon (ex: lesion, fetoplacental). I did like how your group linked definitions for the more complicated terms/medical conditions. I would like to see more linking if a jargony word cannot be avoided. Maybe even considering renaming the title to "mechanism of disease," to reduce jargon even further.

Diagnostic Approach: - great overview of the steps a doctor would take to evaluate the bleeding, very thorough -I also notice a good amount of jargon in this section. As above, I would like to see linked definitions, or simpler terms to make it eaiser for a non-medical person to read (ex: hemodynamically stable --> medically stable pregnant person/ vital signs such as BP and HR are normal) - I would suggest starting the section with the first sentence of the second paragraph, since the sentence is a great way to orient the reader to the broadest organization of the section -Perhaps you could break the section down even further, having subheadings for Physical Exam, Imaging Options, Common Labs Ordered, etc to make it easier to navigate