User talk:Angelicastabile/sandbox

Look back at the guidelines for reliable sources. Cochrane's own works cannot be the bulk of your sources for her page. 64.132.43.68 (talk) 21:04, 28 February 2018 (UTC)

PEER REVIEW (by Jessica)

The lead section looks good to me, so it makes sense that you didn’t change anything there, but they mention Cochrane is an activist for women’s rights, and the original Wiki page does not address this activism at all. After reading the lead section, I was expecting to hear about this. You added a new section called “Fourth Wave Feminism” (which is good!), but is it possible to add an “Activism” section, too? Is there enough information about this?

The lead section also mentions Cochrane was the former Head of Opinion for The Guardian. I would add this information to the career section, if it’s true.

Early life and education: I don’t think “Cochrane being two years old” is a complete sentence, so I believe the use of the semicolon is incorrect here. I’m also not positive about these grammar changes, but I would change “She attended Christ’s Hospital school, Horsham before studying American Literature at the University of Sussex and the University of California, Davis” to “She attended Christ’s Hospital school in West Sussex, before studying American Literature at the University of Sussex and University of California, Davis.” The Wikipedia page for Christ’s Hospital says it’s “south of Horsham in West Sussex.”

Career in journalism: The Huffington Post is now called HuffPost, and it has its own Wikipedia page.

Thank you for changing “on The Sunday Times” to “at The Sunday Times”!

I really like the additions you made! The only edit that seems questionable to me is saying, “Now in her twelfth year as a writer for The Guardian” because this will then have to be changed every single year. In that same sentence, I would also link “progressivism” to its Wiki page.

Writing: In the list of her four books, All the Rebel Women is the only one that is not in italics, and under the description of that book, The Guardian should be in italics as well.

Your section Fourth Wave Feminism is extremely clear and concise, so I love it, but I think because it’s so short, it can be included under the description of All the Rebel Women.

Overall, I think you’re making her page so much better. Many of my suggestions are for errors you didn't even make. I didn’t know who Cochrane was before, so thank you! Her page is going to be awesome when you're through with it. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Jessicasener (talk • contribs) 16:09, 28 March 2018 (UTC)

PEER REVIEW--Madeline Kline
Hi Angelica!

The edits you've made look really good! I think that adding some of her writing to the page really improves the credibility of the page, and also helps readers better understand the scope of Cochrane's writing career. I also think you've done a good job at citing sources. I can tell that you've spent a lot of time working on copywriting and organizing the page, which makes it much easier to read. I think your lead section is strong as well.

As far as changes go, I think that the fourth-wave feminism section that you added is awesome, and has a lot of potential. I'm not sure if theres more information out there, but I think that if there is anything specific that she has done for the movement or any contributions thats she has made it could really strengthen this section. I like Jessica's idea of adding this information to the section on All the Rebel Women. Regardless, I think this is a really interesting section, and definitely is important to note on this page. Also, I think that the Career in journalism section could possibly feature a section on her career at The Sunday Times. If there is an example of a piece that she did there that was particularly impactful, that might be good to include. There are some things on your page that I think could be linked to some other Wikipedia pages, such as the Huffington Post. Another thing that I think would be great is a more recent photo, which I know you have been working on. You have some great information, I really enjoyed reading about Cochrane, and I would love to know more.

Overall, I think that you've made some really great changes! The page is strong and organized, much better than it started. I really like the way you have organized your page with the headings, I think I may try and do something like that on my page! Thanks for the feedback on my page, Kira Cochrane is definitely an excellent resource, and there are definitely some strong connections between her work and the goals of the sex-positive movement.

Klinem (talk) 18:00, 28 March 2018 (UTC) Klinem (talk) 18:10, 28 March 2018 (UTC)