User talk:Ankiiaj/Urban Rivers/Stellydellybelly Peer Review

Right away, I learned what Urban Rivers is. It's an environmental initiative that aims to restore waterways in Chicago.

Something that stood out to me was long sentences. My group also had to fix this. You can look at what can be shorter and straight to the point.

Under partnerships, you shift your focus onto universities and the Chicago Metropolitan Water Reclamation District. A solution to this would simply be to say they work towards the same goal of clean water. You can even simply just link off to Chicago Metropolitan Water instead of going into depth. As a reader, I'm learning about other studies rather than what Urban readers does. Keep it simple and just say who they work with and a simple why.

For organizational structures, who are the directors? Who are the lead researchers and what have they done? Add names who have impacted this organization.

For history, take out some sentences like "There is much local and federal involvement to improve the quality of water in Chicago." This sounds like it's coming from the author, not the organization itself. Another way of shortening this is to link off the Clean Water Act instead of explaining more.

For recent work, in the last sentence, you can make this shorter by saying something like, "This organization takes feedback from the public on how to move forward."

You have solid sections in your article which is great. Be sure to look closer at longer sentences that could be said more straigh to the point. --Stellydellybelly (talk) 19:43, 7 April 2024 (UTC)