User talk:Anmcmillen/sandbox

Caitlyn's Peer Review
I think this sentence could be rephrased to make it easier to read: This hormone in particular is found in large amounts in people with Polar T3 syndrome, or alternatively, the TSH has a heightened sensitivity to the thyrotropin-releasing hormone (TRH). I would also explain what these hormones do to the body and what happens when they are disturbed. '''Perhaps mention people who were affected by the disease and talk about how it impacted their expedition or how many people are diagnosed with the disease. I think the subjects are good and it has a good flow, and the sources look cited correctly. '''

Good Luck and keep working! Cjp0001 (talk) 20:26, 11 September 2018 (UTC)Caitlyn Parker

Rebecca's Peer Review
I agree with Caitlyn in that you should explain what the hormones do to the body. This would give greater detail to the effect of the hormones. Good job in articulating material and providing links to terms that might not be known to the general public.

Rlstatton (talk) 20:11, 13 September 2018 (UTC) Rebecca Statton

Peer Review Reply
Thank you both for the feedback. I will work on being more detailed and rephrasing a few sentences. Anmcmillen (talk) 22:27, 19 September 2018 (UTC)Annie McMillen