User talk:Anna.tonoyan/sandbox

This is a nice start! I'm impressed with the amount of research you've already done and the sheer number of facts you have on this topic. Since the length requirement for this assignment is at least 500 words and you've already met that, I would focus my immediate attention on the organization of your work. At the moment it reads a bit like a collection of individual bullet points. As someone who zoned out a bit too much in high school biology class, I think the inclusion of headers and sub-headers would assist people who are not familiar with the topic to better understand your work and the relevance of some of your information. You may also want to include Wikipedia links to relevant topics - the Great Lakes and phytoplankton, for example - so that people can gain some background info that might further assist with comprehension. One last point: I noticed that you wrote primarily in the active voice and I know that's a major style element that Professor Cassell is looking for. Keep up the good work! Dwolfor3 (talk) 22:35, 14 October 2018 (UTC)

This is a great start to an interesting article! I only found a few things that I believe could be improved. First, I am just having a little bit of trouble connecting how climate change is impacting the political economy from this draft. I would really try to show the multiple connections between climate change and the political economy to ensure that you receive the most points for this Wiki assignment. I believe there are a plethora of examples that will fit easily into this article. I would even think about adding an entire section aimed at explaining these links. The second problem I found is trying to determine if this draft is intended to become a whole new article or it is a contribution to an already existing article. Maybe clear that distinction up. Besides those, great draft! Keep going! Bricci13 (talk) 21:14, 15 October 2018 (UTC)

Article evaluation
The article on the History of Philosophy seems to be well written. The information is accurate, as the article starts by defining the word and its origins. The article remains relevant to the subject, since it does not get off track, but overall it is too general. The article has room to improve, because it can be more in depth and detailed, especially the connection between philosophy and knowledge. The section about Philosophical Progress is very underrepresented. The article is not biased but it is too generalized. Some of the classics, like Socrates and Aristotle seem overlooked. I did not see their work in the sources, which is unreasonable, seeing as they are some of the original thinkers in the field of philosophy. A lot of the information on the sophists' role in the rise of philosophy was also overlooked in the article, since it was very generalized.

Nice job. Next time sign off with four tildes.Cassell04 (talk) 20:03, 11 September 2018 (UTC)

Student contribution.
This is a solid first contribution, the research is substantive and has some real depth. Perhaps you could expand on some of the societal factors and outcomes as a result to the environment impact on these organisms. For example, what kind of policies could be put into place to positively stimulate the ecosystem. What are the more immediate effects to the people around the great lakes? Does this have transitive impacts on other life in the great lakes that could snowball into more significant issues for people and industries on the lakes? Overall, great job!

Zdp3 (talk) 16:33, 18 October 2018 (UTC)zdp3

Peer Review
You've chosen a very fascinating subject as global warming / climate change is a hot topic in any circle. I find the article interesting, you've described these diatoms and their functions in great detail. Maybe you could throw in a picture of what these things look like, or a graph of the recent developments their population. I see that they are reproducing less and becoming smaller with raising water temperatures and carbon saturation. How does this impact the local fauna? What are the long term predictions and possible outcomes to the diatoms future? A well written article and very intellectual. I like that you tackled a local issue as well, nice job! Royo322 (talk) 01:10, 19 October 2018 (UTC)Arroyo