User talk:Annahayes

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Suyá music article
The intro is a good start, but it seems somewhat disjointed. Take a look at other music articles like Music of Turkey. The first sentence should be a concise explanation of the article subject. Save specific musical examples for the rest of the article. I've pasted the paragraph here with a few suggestions: (Start with a definition of Suyá music) The Suyá people are native to Mato Grosso, Brazil. Most of their music is vocal, although rattles and flutes are known to be part of their music from time to time (maybe move this sentence later rewrite in more encyclopedic language). Music is a very important part of every day life for the Suya people (how so?). Their music is passed down orally (cut from here) and thus the reason for the focus on mainly vocals.(to here) (and is used) in myth telling, speech making, and singing.[1] For example, in the initiation ceremony the Suyá people of Brazil teach boys how to sing certain songs as part of their initiation; the boys learn and practice songs under adult supervision in a special forest camp a short distance from their village (this example actually works well here). Although music is used by all members of the tribe, some forms are only used by adults, and even further some are only used by political and ceremonial leaders. (Do you have any info on how or if the music is changing?). Nposs (talk) 14:41, 10 November 2009 (UTC)