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Healthcare in the United States Free Clinic Overall
 * it would be interesting to find out why insurance companies do not provide for alternative treatments if you can find a source about that
 * I'm not sure if there is a place for this in the article but I would be interested in learning about the differences between free clinics and community clinics/community health centers
 * if possible, it would be good the expand the information regarding demographics to the general population of the U.S. rather than just Charlottesville, especially for details such as race, gender, and income level/socioeconomic status
 * under the effectiveness of free clinics, are there studies/sources regarding how certain metrics of health have changed/improved with the establishment of a free clinic in a community?

You did a really good job in making the information encyclopedic in tone and these feel like a really solid start to your articles. Sneha.s.mehta (talk) 07:22, 19 March 2018 (UTC)

Healthcare in the United States

 * I think alternative medicine would be a great thing to add to Providers. I would even expand further on services that fall under that categorization, and perhaps what they provide that distinguishes them from non-alternative medicine, and why people seek that.
 * Some of the last few sentences in your section to add to affordable care act effects are a little hard to understand, just in terms of the significance of the impact on patients.
 * Perhaps adding some of the positive aspects of Medicaid to that section you're proposing would help you with having a more neutral tone. Right now you point out many of the downsides, so perhaps balance that with some benefits.

Free clinic
Having the section convey more of a broad coverage.
 * For the demographics section, what is the significance of the amount for annual budgets and number of patients? Perhaps comparing that to something else (i.e. what the annual budget is for a non-free clinic) would give that statistic more meaning and weight.
 * (small detail - last sentence in demographics should be in order to, rather than to order to)
 * Since this demographics section presumably won't be under the section for Virginia (unless it will be?) perhaps adding another source that corroborates what's been seen in Charlottesville but in another location would make the section more well-rounded, especially since the section is called demographics.
 * In the Effectiveness section, perhaps "much less expensive" rather than much more inexpensive?
 * A few of the sentences in the effectiveness section are unsourced (like the sentence about free clinics' ability to provide long term, sustainable service and maintain continuity of care). If they all come from the same source at the end of the paragraph (7), then perhaps finding a few more sources to corroborate this information would be good. There seems to be only one source for this new section you're hoping to add.

overall notes
I really liked a lot of the additions you proposed! I think Healthcare in the United States was a particularly hard one to tackle, since it is so extensive and developed already. There certainly is a lot more you can do with the free clinic article, and I think your additions will be great once expanded upon a little more. Gsakoda (talk) 06:29, 20 March 2018 (UTC)

Peer Review of Mainspace Work
Firstly, I apologize for the delay. Here are my edits/thoughts!

Healthcare in the United States

Providers->Facilities

Consider changing "besides" to something with a more neutral tone, such as "in addition to". In your last sentence consider changing "would be" to "is".

Alternative medicine

First off, I love that you added another section. I think you mentioned why in your presentation, but I forgot. Nevertheless, I think that this is a great addition to your article! Consider changing your third sentence to "They include, but are not limited to, herbs, massages, energy healing, and homeopathy." For your third to last sentence of this section, I believe it needs a period before the conjunction: "They aim not to treat just physical illness, but..."

Patient Protection and Affordable Care Act (2010)

Consider revising the wording of the sentences in this section. The wording is a little awkward, and a little bit hard to follow at times. E.g. change "However, two months later, the office subsequently acknowledged that there was an additional $115 billion in funds needed that were not originally included in the estimate." to "However, two months later, the office acknowledged that they needed an additional $115 billion in funds that was originally not included in the estimate".

Overall, I think that you have a great variety of added material, and it all helps to add more balance to your article. I think most of it comes off as being very encyclopedic.

--Eklui (talk) 00:30, 30 April 2018 (UTC)