User talk:AnneD17/sandbox

Peer Review - Kayla McGuiness
- I like that you expanded the lead section because it was far too short and lacking in information before. The first paragraph starts out strong and I like that you added additional paragraphs for each religion as well. However, I do feel that this could be condensed slightly because some of the sentences you repeat later on in your other sections. Other than that, I feel that you have a good introduction.

- The original Bahá'í Faith section I found confusing and lacking in information when I read it. Being that you were unable to find a lot of information on this, I think you did a good job expanding the section and working with what you could find. I also like how you went further in depth about the religions beliefs on focusing how to prevent crime rather than on how to punish it.

- Great job adding to the Hinduism section. The supporting and opposing the death penalty sub-sections are a good way to divide the section up and give the reader a better understanding of both sides of the argument in the Hindu culture.

- The Concluding paragraph in the Hinduism section makes me feel more as if you are writing a paper on the topic rather than writing on Wikipedia. Because there is good information in it I don't feel that you should get rid of it all together but I do think that changing the heading would be beneficial. Side note: In the last sentence of this paragraph you forgot the d in believed.

- Very good job with your citations. I can see that you have pulled from many different sources for each section so the reader will be receiving a good variety of information. Overall, good job writing in an encyclopedic way.

- So far it's looking great! Keep up the good work! Kmcguiness95 (talk) 22:23, 18 March 2018 (UTC)

Peer review - Morgan Mills
General comments: I like how your article is sectioned by religion; it makes it easy to read and understand. I also think your citations are done very well, and you've used many sources.

Baha’I Faith section: You expanded the original very well. I like that you mentioned that the religion leaves capital punishment up to society. Overall, this is a very strong paragraph.

Hinduisum: I like that you briefly went into the Hindu teachings opposing capital punishment, but went on to show evidence for both support and opposition of capital punishment.

I do not feel that the conclusion was necessary and I believe one of the tutorials online recommended not writing one.

Also, at first I accidentally was reading your edits on Christianity. Just as a precautionary, I would be careful in this section because it almost sounded a little subjective. Good work overall! M.mills3 (talk) 18:19, 19 March 2018 (UTC)