User talk:Anniefdunn/sandbox

Review response
1. What were the most helpful comments/suggestions you received, and why? I received several very helpful comments. For one, the tip about my use of "Shidzue" throughout the article, as I was a bit confused about what to refer to her as. She had several surnames and I found that using the surnames to correspond to certain times in her life was confusing. I will definitely change it so that the name is consistent throughout. Additionally, I found the comment about additional sources very helpful and I will visit those source soon. 2. Are there certain suggestions you do NOT plan to take up in your continued work on your article? Why not? I'm not sure yet if I am going to absorb the "Eugenics" and "Arrest" sections into their larger section, I think I will first see if I can find a few more sources regarding those and if I can't find anything substantial I will make them part of the larger article. 3. Are there suggestions you do intend to address? If so, how do you plan to address them? I am going to address pretty much all of these. I have already deleted the "Praise" and "Also known as" sections as suggested by Shalor. I also plan to make the name more consistent throughout the article, mostly likely addressing her by her first name as she has three different surnames throughout her life. I will also definitely check the grammar and sentence structure mistakes pointed out to me. Finally, I plan to do more research to make the article a bit fuller. I will definitely add our class book by Kano as a source to strengthen some of the sections. I will also head to the library as soon as I can to look at "Re-imagining Japanese Women". 4. I found the process of receiving reviews very helpful because it gave more another perspective on my article and pointed out things that I may have missed. Additionally, reviewing other people's articles was beneficial because I gave me ideas about how to improve my own article by seeing how other people are approaching theirs. Anniefdunn (talk) 05:09, 27 February 2018 (UTC)

Instructor Response to your Peer Review Response
Thank you for your thoughtful response to the comments you have received. You seem to be right where you need to be for this stage of the project, and I think that by following through on the suggestions you discussed in your peer review response, you will end up with a very good article. Elyssafaison (talk) 07:28, 27 February 2018 (UTC)