User talk:AnonymousPerson9/sandbox

Neutrality: The article sounds more like a narrative than a biography, strong bias vocabulary needs to be fixed and specifics rather than words like many, numerous or most. Myrta article is good on neutrality

What's missing: Links need to be added for specific information, inconsistency in the trial and aftermath section, section on life as a slave. In Myrta article, there are links missing for the memoirs that she edited. Needs links for the Christian Herald.

Lead section and summary: The introduction needs a lot of help. The first sentence needs to be more specific and concise, it speaks in very general terms. The summary hits on many different points, which is good, however, the information needs to be more specific, changing words like afterward, eventually, and 'a year later' to actual dates. The introduction states information about his life as a slave, but it is left out completely from the rest of the article.

Review by: Niki Long, Elizabeth Torres, Ishani Kapoor — Preceding unsigned comment added by AnonBos22 (talk • contribs) 17:25, 2 November 2018 (UTC)