User talk:Anthony f/sandbox

Hi! Suggestions for edits: - remove the bold font for your subheading, or reduce font size -intro sentence, would change the order of words around from "In 2004 the Canadian Government’s Species at Risk (SARA) registry placed Barren-Ground Caribou as under the status of special concern" to: in 2004, the barren ground caribou was given special concern status on SARA, or something like that (the registry itself didn't place the caribou, the caribou was placed on a registry, if that makes sense) -second sentence: " arctic is predicted" = ARE predicted (changes are plural) -2nd paragraph: "access to Lichen; their main food source" - remove the semi colon, replace with comma (or reverse to access to their main food source, Lichen -additional typo or two in 2nd paragraph -SUPER interesting fact in 3rd paragraph, summed up really well and has good impact -"Insect harassment force Caribou" - forces * -Last paragraph order of facts should be modified a bit, e.g. include insect facts together. -overall does need grammar edits (should arctic always be capitalized?), may want to consider reordering some information to follow a chronology (e.g. caribou life cycle and threats), but really great job synthesizing and pulling out important general details

Maral.m (talk) 20:08, 17 February 2018 (UTC)

Hi Maral, Thank you for peer-reviewing my page. I have made the changes you recommended, I will be editing my article and posting it back into my sandbox in the coming days. --Anthony f (talk) 17:19, 18 February 2018 (UTC)

Hey Anthony!

Great work so far! I like the way you've made the information easy to read and you explain the content well. There are a couple of areas that could use some touching up for the grammar...if you want me to make edits and suggestions in a word document and send that you, I would be more than happy to! Don't hesitate to ask. I think it would be a good idea to separate some of the information into sub-headers so that it is a little bit more specific in terms of each group of ideas; not a huge deal though. Overall, your page is coming along really well. --Mstanley294 (talk) 02:12, 18 February 2018 (UTC)

Hi Megan, Thank you for peer-reviewing my page. Please feel free to recommend any grammatical errors you see in my article, also I think sub-headers is an excellent idea I will try and work them into the article and see how they fit. Thank you --Anthony f (talk) 17:19, 18 February 2018 (UTC)