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The Imitation Game

There needs to be more information on Alan Turing's real life to prove that the film was historically inaccurate in some areas. There is also a spelling error.

Aorger6 (talk) 00:08, 6 February 2015 (UTC)


 * Go ahead and fix the spelling error. If you find another problem with spelling, grammar, or clarity, fix that, and you'll be done with this assignment. As for information on Turing's life, that topic should be part of an article on the real-life Turing and doesn't need to be in this article. I only have a problem with this statement in that section: "The film has received criticism from historians and academics regarding the events and people it portrays." The statement remains uncited, and I wonder if academics and historians really care that much. They understand the difference between a documentary and a historical drama. I suspect most of the criticism comes from film critics and fans (the section mostly cited reviews of the film). It might be worthwhile to raise this issue on the article talk page if you have the time. Josef Horáček (talk) 20:35, 7 February 2015 (UTC)

Dean Winchester This article needs additional sources. Aorger6 (talk) 01:00, 9 February 2015 (UTC)
 * Approved. Josef Horáček (talk) 18:26, 10 February 2015 (UTC)

Change in Article List of Captain America Titles I'm changing my article because I couldn't find sources on my original choice. My new article is much easier to find information for. Aorger6 (talk) 21:34, 11 February 2015 (UTC)

Sources for Assignment 2
Source 1 Source 2 Source 3 Source 4
 * Your first source is an encyclopedia - it's against WP policy to use other encyclopedias as sources. Your other sources look great, but I wonder how relevant they will be for the article you chose. Keep in mind that this article is about the published Capt. America titles - it's not the main Capt. America article. Josef Horáček (talk) 00:35, 17 February 2015 (UTC)

My last three sources all include titles of Captain America comic books, and they also include information of the comic book writers. Both are part of the article that I am editing. My new source to replace the first one is here. Aorger6 (talk) 23:51, 19 February 2015 (UTC)
 * Great job. Only one comment about the way you formatted the citations in the article: the links you added won't work. It would be best to remove the links and instead include the name of the database you used in each reference. Josef Horáček (talk) 02:25, 2 March 2015 (UTC)

Removed links. Aorger6 (talk) 16:49, 3 March 2015 (UTC)

Assignment 3
Benji Madden is the article I'm choosing for assignment 3. I think the article is pretty well balanced considering it isn't extremely long. The information seems to be in the correct order, too. Aorger6 (talk) 00:21, 23 February 2015 (UTC)

Benji Madden
Benjamin Levi "Benji" Madden (born March 11, 1979) is an American guitarist and vocalist for the band Good Charlotte, and he is now a part of The Madden Brothers, a pop rock collaboration with his twin brother, Joel Madden. Both Good Charlotte and The Madden Brothers were founded by him and Joel Madden. Benji Madden is also a songwriter, a record producer, and a judge on The Voice Australia. He is married to actress Cameron Diaz. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Aorger6 (talk • contribs) 20:58, 26 February 2015 (UTC)
 * This is a worthy projects, but your lead still needs work. Here are my suggestions. In the first sentence, mention the things Madden does (guitarist, vocalist, songwriter, producer...). Then, in the second sentence, mention the groups he's played with. Make sure it's clear that Good Charlotte no longer exists and that his current project is The Madden Brothers (at least that's what the article seems to suggest). In the third sentence you can say that he started both acts with his twin brother Joel. Then mention The Voice etc. Josef Horáček (talk) 02:34, 2 March 2015 (UTC)

Benjamin Levi "Benji" Madden (born March 11, 1979) is an America guitarist, vocalist, songwriter, and producer. He was the guitarist for the band Good Charlotte and is now a part of the pop rock collaboration The Madden Brothers. He formed both of these acts with his identical twin brother, Joel Madden. Benji is now a judge on The Voice Australia. He is married to actress Cameron Diaz. Aorger6 (talk) 17:04, 3 March 2015 (UTC)