User talk:Apocalyssa/sandbox

Martin's Peer Review
Hey guys, I think you've done an awesome job in improving this Wikipedia page. I think its smart that you changed the placement of the 'History' section to a more logical position in the article. It was difficult for me to find any major errors.

So... the errors that I did find are minor. I'll do my best to point them out by quoting the sentence where the error is located and by providing an explanation in parentheses.

1. "not from disk pathology, but form lumbar spinal stenosis" (word 'form' is meant to be 'from') 2. "has been predominantly seen in the population 50 to 60 years old population" (word 'population is repeated) 3."Furthermore, there is a now disproportionate rise in spinal surgeries being performed for this age group" (words 'a' and 'now' ought to be flip-flopped) also (I was a little confused about the 'age group' discussed, is it the elderly age group?)

I hope it's easy to find the portions of the text I pointed-out; it was sort of difficult to find major errors so I looked for simple ones. Great job, hit me up if anything I've said is confusing.

Martin Lawson (talk) 03:01, 28 November 2018 (UTC)