User talk:Apple-J-axe/sandbox

Tone
Good paragraph. The tone could be refined to be more encyclopedic. Statements like 'In recent years,' imply that the reader is reading it a specific year which may not be the case. Please review the tone section when rewording your paragraph. Bryantlib (talk) 02:17, 1 May 2018 (UTC)

Content
This is a good start with some specific information related to cider apple orchards. However, I'd like you to make some comparisons between modern high-density systems and traditional orchards. Why has there been a decrease in the number of traditional orchards? Highlight a couple few pros and cons of each system so that the reader understands why there has been a transition over time.

I suggest looking at the books on reserve at Mann.

Also see:

"Cider Apple Growers Guide" by Liz Copas: https://newcatalog.library.cornell.edu/catalog/4396830

and

http://www.archiveofciderpomology.co.uk/archivereports/sustainableciderappleproduction7.2.4.pdf

Ciderprof1 (talk) 15:47, 7 May 2018 (UTC)

Before making the paragraph 'live'
Remember to work with group members when uploading to the live page to ensure you dont upload the same information. Also consider how you will insert your information into the existing cider page. You may have to break up your sentences or not include everything depending on the information that is already on the page.

PROOFREAD your paragraph before you make your information 'live'.

Before you post make sure one person in your group created a new section on the Cider apple talk page you are uploading to, letting the people watching the page know you are making edits. And also make sure you summarize your final change, when submitting to the live page. If you don't remember how to do these steps, re-watch the tutorial. :)Bryantlib (talk) 15:49, 7 May 2018 (UTC)