User talk:Apple1223/sandbox

Kelly Wallert Peer Review
After reading this, it’s clear to see that you have an idea as to what you’re writing. It is clear and concise and gets to the point. Although if I were you I would add more sections, and start to organize more. It looks like you’re using a great number of resources which helps get your point across. I think that the content overall is improved by adding maybe some images, more resources, and some in-text citations.