User talk:Apt551/sandbox

Apt551_P3D1CM
I decided to add to the articles Cladocore caespotosa and Balanophylli europaea because they were corals used in some of the scientific papers I reviewed for project 2 and I noticed these pages had little information so I wanted to help expand them. I decided to create an article on Porites cylindric because I had also read about this coral while I was working on my review for project 2. I decided to use these corals because the other corals I have read about had more substantial extensive Wikipedia articles.

Wikipedia should accept these articles and my additions to these articles because they focus on single subjects. Also, my additions are written with a neutral point of view and only describing scientifically proven statements. These articles meet the standards of non-triviality because they are based on scientific articles that control for variables. These articles meet the standard of quality expected by Wikipedia in that they are clear and informative. The credibility of source information is sufficient because the IUCN Red List for Threatened Species and World Registration of Marine Species are both secondary sources that site where they got their primary sources and are both used in other approved Wikipedia articles.

Summary
The author proposes to add a new article on Porites cylindrica, which contains the taxonomic information from phylum through genus and species. The author has also included an additional edit to various subsections of Balanophylli europaea and Cladocora caespitosa. With the C. caespitosa edit adding information on habitat and distribution, and the B. europaea adding information on the biology of the coral reef.

Major Points
The introductory sentence for the beginning of the new article is concise and simple, it gives an accurate description of what is being discussed. It should be noted the author uses solid secondary sources, as well as primary. These citations appear to be accurately used, and the citation style is in form with Wikipedia standards. It should be noted this article is very clearly written. Tonality of the new articles is professional, with no personal point of view added. The same goes for the addition of the Cladocore caespitosa subsection, which is also very clear. The additional information for the subsection of Balanophylli europaea is tonally professional and encyclopedic. It currently sounds concise, and contains a cited secondary source.

The addition of the new articles as well as the additions to the currently existing sections will be a great starting point for yourself and the rest of the Wikipedia community to build upon.

Minor Points
Most, if not all, sentences in this draft are concise. The only thing that stuck out was the lack of an "also" in "it has been found in waters that are 20 meters deep", it would seem to make more sense given the sentence preceding it. Also it may be worth fixing the third citation, which begins with a date (2012), I believe it may be worth adding the organization name given through the template. More information can be found here.

Marsh32 (talk) 15:04, 22 November 2015 (UTC)

Major points
The article is clear and concise. The info box on the right side looks great and is very useful. No major content or style issues.

Minor points
In the Distribution and Habitat section, the first sentence says Porites cylindrica ARE common, implying that the species is plural. However, the next sentence uses "it" to refer to the species and not "they."

I would consider changing the Description to read "P. cylindrica are hermatypic (reef-building) corals that can grow..." This tells casual readers what "hermatypic" means without having to navigate away to read the whole definition. Freeman.k (talk) 23:58, 22 November 2015 (UTC)

Apt551_P3CM
I decided to add to the articles Cladocore caespotosa and Balanophylli europaea because they were corals used in some of the scientific papers I reviewed for project 2 and I noticed these pages had little information so I wanted to help expand them. I decided to create an article on Porites cylindric because I had also read about this coral while I was working on my review for project 2. I decided to use these corals because the other corals I have read about had more extensive Wikipedia articles. For this project, I was also assigned a page titled, "Balanophyllia europea", however, I think this was just a spelling error because this coral does not exist and I think it meant to be "Balanophylli europaea". Balanophylli europaea has an article in which I contributed to.

Wikipedia should accept these articles and my additions to these articles because they focus on single subjects. Also, my additions are written with a neutral point of view and only describing scientifically proven statements. These articles meet the standards of non-triviality because they are based on scientific articles that control for variables. These articles meet the standard of quality expected by Wikipedia in that they are clear and informative. The credibility of source information is sufficient because the IUCN Red List for Threatened Species and World Registration of Marine Species are both secondary sources that site where they got their primary sources and are both used in other approved Wikipedia articles. The World Registration of Marine Sciences is also a secondary source article.