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Patellar wotsit syndrome
Hi there, I saw your post on the helpdesk. I would have answered you there if someone had not already advised you to go to WP:PR, so I will answer you here instead. I don't think the article is going to have a problem staying, it has a reference to a verifiable source which is the main thing.

The biggest problem that I see with it is there is too much jargon. It is fine to use technical terms but you must always remember that you are writing for a general audience and you will need to explain them. I could work out for myself that patellar is concerning the kneecap but many others cannot. I have no idea what subluxate means without looking it up. Does the condition have a common name? If so, Wikipedia naming conventions (WP:NAME) dictates that that should be the name of the article. That alone will go a long way to making it more accesible to a wider audience. The technical name would still be bolded in the lede along with the common name. It can also be a redirect. There is no explanation of what is actually experienced by a sufferer, are they crippled, just in pain, what? I have come away from the article knowing no more than it is something to do with the kneecap, and I got that much from the title.

A picture would be great if you can find one, that helps any article. If you are any good at diagrams - that too. Some statistics can be added if you can find them; rates of occurence, demographics, that sort of thing.

If you are not going to significantly expand this article then you should use a stub template. Template:Med-stub is probably the most appropriate. Also, it needs categorizing. You can probably find appropriate cats by looking for similar medical articles and copying them. If you can't manage that, don't worry, someone else will come along and do it.

Hope that helps you, drop a note on my talk page if you want further explanation of anything.  Sp in ni ng  Spark  22:27, 9 November 2008 (UTC)

Okay
Okay, I am testing out my signature.--Mr. X 04:27, 22 November 2008 (UTC)

Otter
Do you want me to make you an otter?--D3t3ctiv3 (talk) 02:31, 13 January 2009 (UTC)