User talk:ArianaDuford/sandbox

Hey! So you're planning to add a ton of information to this article. Great Job! I like that a significant amount of your information is backed up by easily accessible sources. Additionally, it is clearly articulated and organized super well. As for things to work on, I would add a "sports" or "athletics" section as well when you divide up accomplishments into academics. The information for that is already in the original piece, so it'll be easy to crossover. I guess check those sources too and make sure that they are all up to date. I also noticed that at the top of the original article there is an issue with the article about it being reliant on too many primary sources, which you seem to continue doing with your statistics. I'd ask our Prof what to do about this/ someone on Wikipedia because it may need some adjustment. I don't totally know why primary sources are so wrong (maybe they're just less accessible?) But yeah something to consider. Besides those small things, great work!! Elisabethholmes (talk) 07:33, 16 October 2016 (UTC)

Hi, Elisabeth! Thank you so much for the feedback, I really appreciate it. I just want to address some of your suggestions. It was never my intention to edit the entire article, I was mainly interested in the education side of the article, which is why I added an academic section and built upon the information for the different schools. I really didn't plan to add a "sports" section, that's why I wrote my paragraphs all on academics. Thanks for bringing to my attention the primary source warning banner! I do have sources other than the ones from New York State's official education site but just to be sure I emailed the wiki expert for our course, Ian and he said although it's a primary source, my use of government statistics is completely fine as long as I do not draw conclusions on them - which I didn't. Thank you again for the help :)!!! ArianaDuford (talk) 16:50, 19 October 2016 (UTC)