User talk:Arianabarron/sandbox

Week 2
Whoa, you went to the Donald Trump page! Hah. Did you see how much activity his page has had recently? Amazing to see all the discussions on his talk page. You did a good job being as impartial and non-problematic as possible. I liked that you were careful there. Well done. Your answers to the questions in your sandbox, conversely, were pretty mediocre. In future assignments, please write much more for answers. Expand, give examples, provide your insights or your rationale for your answers, etc. You should write much more! Alfgarciamora (talk) 19:45, 30 January 2017 (UTC)

Week 4
An excellent job this week, Ariana! You really impressed me! If you are going to move forward with your character's page, make sure you do as you say: find the information that is not on there, like his relationship with the king and the role he had in the French Revolution, and use your sources to the best of your ability. You will have to do a lot of skimming and scanning in order to do this effectively, I think, so don't get bogged down in the details of the publications that you are considering. Alfgarciamora (talk) 19:19, 13 February 2017 (UTC)

Peer Review
Everything seems to be written well and adhering to Wikipedia format. I'm not sure what you will be adding to the article, though, as opposed to what was already there before you began the project, so I would suggest you make that more clear. I also noticed that you said, under the title of "Liberal Ideology" that your character "advocated for feudal privilege and against slavery." I think you meant to say that he was against feudalism AND slavery. I don't know your character, but maybe double check this.

Also, I'd suggest you double check the lead section and consider making it better: maybe add more stuff, or make it more substantive. You know best!

Hope this helped. Chrisgonz321 (talk) 22:33, 2 March 2017 (UTC)

Peer Review Response
Thank you for your peer review @chrisgonz321. I've been copy-editing the article on my sandbox, changing up some grammatical errors and awkward sentences, and adding to it, so I've totally forgotten to label my added material. Thanks for reminding me! The sentence you mentioned under my "liberal ideology" section was also a typo, so thank you so much for pointing that out! Just like you, I feel that my lead section is still too short. As I complete my research, I will add to it. I will apply the changes you suggested. Arianabarron (talk) 23:02, 2 March 2017 (UTC)

Week 8
You've done an absolutely INCREDIBLE job, !! Wowza! You have really added such a great number of sentences, citations, etc. I am so impressed with your work!! It is one of the best pages of the entire class. Thank you for taking the time to do such great additions. You can consider yourself practically done with all the research and writing. Just go back and make sure everything is organized, properly cited, and that you have finished all the little details you might have pending. Best of luck wrapping it all up. Alfgarciamora (talk) 17:02, 20 March 2017 (UTC)