User talk:AricFedida

Welcome
--- Mgm|(talk) 23:10, 15 July 2006 (UTC)

InterWallet
Hi! I saw your note on AmiDaniel's talk page. The article that was here previously was written as an advertisement and since Wikipedia is an encyclopedia, we have strict rules against advertising and WP:SPAM. The article you wrote as a replacement is a lot better, but a here's a few pointers to make it a bit better. P.S. There's no bias against Israeli products, it's just a simple fact that worldwide operating companies that have been in business for a few years and are known across the net are more likely to get an article and keep it. Your article doesn't say anything on when it started, how much money they make or how many sites use Interwallet. which could be a sign of a new company (see WP:CORP). Also, money orders and stuff like that is prone to fraud. The ID cards take a bit off that, but what do they do if that card is fake too. A lot of those companies don't accept the payments Interwallet offer because of fraud sensitivity. Why do they think they can do it? - Mgm|(talk) 23:10, 15 July 2006 (UTC)
 * 1) The last two sections use the word 'you' as if they address a customer. Try rewording the sections with words like 'the Interwallet user' and rename the sections something like "ways to deposit money to Interwallet" and "Ways to use Interwallet money" to eliminate the word you from the section titles.
 * 2) Try to find sources apart from the company's website to verify they're a reliable company. Any nutter can set up a website and claim they offer a service. As an editor it's your responsibility to provide your readers with the information on where you got the stuff in the article from and to provide reliable sources. I wish you happy editing and feel free to ask if you need to know something. - Mgm|(talk) 23:10, 15 July 2006 (UTC)
 * I can't hide articles, but what I can do is move it to your userspace so you can tinker with the article until you've perfected it. Should I do that? - Mgm|(talk) 21:56, 25 July 2006 (UTC)
 * Nah, I think it can be tinkered with where it is. Its worst bit is the lack of references. Try and take a look at the changes I made (you don't need underscores either) and read over Article development. - Mgm|(talk) 21:49, 27 July 2006 (UTC)
 * Note: My B-day was in May, but thanks all the same. - Mgm|(talk) 21:55, 27 July 2006 (UTC)