User talk:Arozumov14/sandbox

Draft comments
Hi, I've made a few changes to your draft improvement to Aida Overton Walker.

I'd say it mostly looks good to be added to that article. The only recommendation I would make is to try to work on the prose a bit so it sounds more dispassionate. Claims like "Even after her death in 1914 she was written about in papers and gained even more fame" would need a strong source (namely a newspaper noting the wide reporting, or references to multiple papers writing about her after her death, etc.). Additionally, "She was very in tune with how the roles she played had and impact on race relations of the time. Within her roles she worked hard to break the stereotypes of black women being both immoral and oversexed." could be true but really demands a source, otherwise it's merely the speculation of an editor who wrote her wikipedia page.

It's hard to be dispassionate when covering interesting subjects, but remaining as neutral as possible is one of the core expectations readers have of the encyclopedia. Let me know if you need any help with this. Thanks. Adam (Wiki Ed) (talk) 19:20, 8 December 2014 (UTC)