User talk:Asanto22/sandbox

The topic looks interesting. Everything looks good, except I think it would be better if you put in a mechanism section and describe how it affects the body.Nthaiba (talk) 21:41, 15 November 2019 (UTC)NT

I really like the layout of your wiki page but I do agree with above that a mechanism section would be helpful. I also think that maybe the section that discusses TWIST2 could be edited by just rewording the sentences to make them a little more "user friendly" so that someone without a science background could understand (obviously that might be difficult because it is so in depth but maybe there is something you could do. Overall I think it looks really great and has some really great information! --Rworley02 (talk) 01:55, 16 November 2019 (UTC)

--Sweiner02 (talk) 22:13, 5 December 2019 (UTC)
 * You have done a good job of expanding and clarifying
 * It looks like you started brainstorming mechanism, then got stuck. There is definitely some information out there, even if it's limited. If you need help finding sources, come talk to me. Some you have in the causes section that could be elaborated here.
 * Missing prognosis and recent research.
 * I'm not sure why you combined diangosis and treatment. They were previously separate sections, and our rubric has them separate as well. I would suggest that you separate them back out.
 * Some sections (particularly treatment) could use more citations.