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I propose to make the corrections of the first paragraph as follows:

When King Louis’ second wife, Constance of Castile, died in childbirth, King Louis was in search of another wife to bear him a son as he had no male heir as of yet. Five weeks later, Adela of Champagne at the age of fifteen became King Louis’ third wife. Adela went on to give birth to Louis VII’s only male heir, Philip II and to the Byzantine empress Agnes.

I also propose to add these paragraphs to a section that talks about her marriage to King Louis VII:

The marriage between Adela and Louis VII served as a peace treaty between one of King Louis’ most rebellious vassals, Theobald II of Champagne who was an incredibly powerful feudal lord of France. The marriage was a way to ensure peace between the crown and Theobald.

Five years into their marriage, Adela gave birth to the only son Louis ever had, Philip Augustus, also called Philip “Dieu-Donne” or “God-given” seeing as he his birth was long awaited to be Louis successor of an empire that had had such a long lineage of undisputed and unbroken male successors to the french throne. Philip’s birth meant the continuing rule of Capetian monarchs in France.

Aschenbrenermg (talk) 02:25, 6 November 2018 (UTC)

These are the changes that I propose to make to the first paragraph

Adela of Champagne (French: Adèle; c. 1140 – 4 June 1206), also known as Adelaide and Alix, was Queen of France as the third wife of Louis VII. She was the third child and first daughter of Theobald II, Count of Champagne, and Matilda of Carinthia children and had nine brothers and sisters. She was named after her grandmother, Adela of Normandy. She was regent of France in the absence of her son in 1190. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Aschenbrenermg (talk • contribs) 20:29, 11 November 2018 (UTC)

the following minor edits have been made

The marriage between Adela and Louis VII served as a peace treaty between one of King Louis’ most rebellious vassals, Theobald II of Champagne who was an incredibly powerful feudal lord of France. The marriage was a way to ensure peace between the crown and Theobald.[4] Four years after theur marriage, Adela's coronation was held.

Five years into their marriage and a year after her coronation, Adela gave birth to the only son Louis ever had, Philip Augustus, also called Philip “Dieu-Donne” or “God-given” seeing as he his birth was long awaited to be Louis successor of an empire that had had such a long lineage of undisputed and unbroken male successors to the french throne. Philip’s birth meant the continuing rule of Capetian monarchs in France. [5] — Preceding unsigned comment added by Aschenbrenermg (talk • contribs) 20:37, 11 November 2018 (UTC)

helpful comments
I thought that you did a very good job keeping your point neutral and biased. You also kept your facts short and consise, and made sure that you added more about Adelas family. The family tree does a good job, however, I think it is a little complicated to follow, and there could be some more information referring to it. Since there is little to no information on the subject it was very hard for me to find sources that you had not found already, so I apologize by not having any sources to add. All around though I thought that you added very appropriately, and did a very nice job!!!

WELL DONE — Preceding unsigned comment added by Acvile1220 (talk • contribs) 16:02, 28 November 2018 (UTC)