User talk:Ash3Guldi3/Patricia Hurl

New Article
This is a proposal for a new article for Patricia Hurl. Included is the notable information on her and all the reliable sources I found and used. @Ian (Wiki Ed) Ash3Guldi3 (talk) 18:25, 16 April 2024 (UTC)


 * Hi @Ash3Guldi3. This is a good start, but there are a few things you need to do before it's ready to go live.
 * Your draft doesn't have inline citations, which makes it difficult for readers to verify factual statements in your article. Every statement should be followed by a supporting citation; if a group of sentences are all supported by the same source, you can place a single reference after all of them, but you need to have at least one reference per paragraph, and you shouldn't have any statements after the final reference in a paragraph. If you need a refresher on how to add citations, please consult this training module.
 * The lead section needs to be a summary of the key points of the article. So something like When she married, she settled in the suburbs to raise kids shouldn't be there unless it's a key element of why she's notable.
 * Also settled in the suburbs is too vague. Suburbs of what city? And to raise kids is too informal for Wikipedia; you should use "children" rather than "kids".
 * Your quotes are too long. Use your own words as much as possible. When you use quotes, keep them short, ideally less than a sentence, and only use them in places wherewhere the quoted words significantly improve the reader's understanding. There's no reason to include phrases like Since the 1980s... and The exhibition demonstrates....
 * Ian (Wiki Ed) (talk) 02:59, 17 April 2024 (UTC)
 * I have made some changes and added citations, please let me know what you think. @Ian (Wiki Ed) Ash3Guldi3 (talk) 01:40, 6 May 2024 (UTC)