User talk:Ash Chollette

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Peer Review by Carson Curtis
Article you are reviewing: Ash-Throated Fly Catcher


 * 1) First,     what does the article do well? Is there anything from your review that     impressed you? Any turn of phrase that described the subject in a clear     way?

I think this article does a great job of describing the species especially the taxonomy aspect of the page. The first sentence of the description subheading does a great job of clearly providing an overview of this species.


 * 1) What changes     would you suggest the author apply to the article? Why would those changes     be an improvement?

I would suggest the author add a few more images and maybe some information in the behavior section. I think this would help make the page look less bare and I also believe the behavior aspect of the species is more important than what is represented.


 * 1) What's     the most important thing the author could do to improve the article?

I think the most important thing the author could do to improve this page would be continue to add new information to the article because the information on the page currently is wonderful, I just think the page could use more.


 * 1) Did     you notice anything about the article you reviewed that could be applicable     to your own article? If so, what?

I think the conservation and threat subheading would be a good piece of information to add to my article simply because the conservation of biology is important


 * 1) Are     the sections organized well, in a sensible order? Would they make more     sense presented some other way (chronologically, for example)? Specifically, does the information     they are adding to the article make sense where they are putting it?

The sections are very neatly organized, and I somewhat agree with where they are adding their information to the article. I think the new information could also fall under the Behavior subsection just as easily.


 * 1) Is     each section's length equal to its importance to the article's subject?     Are there sections in the article that seem unnecessary? Is anything     off-topic?

I think some of the sections in this article are underrepresented such as the behavior section, but I do not see any sections that are irrelevant or of little importance


 * 1) Does     the article draw conclusions or try to convince the reader to accept one     particular point of view?

I do not think the article tries to convince the reader to accept any particular point of view. The article seems to be very unbiased and factually based.


 * 1) Are     there any words or phrases that don't feel neutral? For example, "the     best idea," "most people," or negative associations, such     as "While it's obvious that x, some insist that y."

There are no words or phrases that do not feel neutral. I read over the entire article and I did not see anything that struck me as biased or opinionated.


 * 1) Are     most statements in the article connected to a reliable source, such as     textbooks and journal articles? Or do they rely on blogs or self-published     authors?

Most of the statements in the article are connected to a reliable source. While a few sources are from websites, most of these sources are from academic papers and reliable scientific organizations.


 * 1) Are     there a lot of statements attributed to one or two sources? If so, it may     lead to an unbalanced article, or one that leans too heavily into a single     point of view.

I did not see one source that was just extremely overused, I think for the most part this article is pretty balanced. I still think it just could use more information on this species.


 * 1) Are     there any unsourced statements in the article, or statements that you     can't find stated in the references? Just because there is a source     listed, doesn't mean it's presented accurately!

I did not see any statements that could not be backed by one of the references. Overall, I thought this was a pretty good article.

Note: For the new information being added into the article, I thought the paragraph was very good from an informational aspect. I think there could be a few adjustments grammar wise such as maybe taking out the part describing a nestling and changing “amount” to “amounts” in the first sentence. Overall I think you did a great job on this rough draft!

THERooster10 (talk) 04:11, 10 October 2022 (UTC)