User talk:Ashlynn.Krieger.2/sandbox

Rating=2. Could be published with extra effort to improve quality. The first couple of sentences illustrate some general problems with this article: "William James’s stream of consciousness can be defined as, a state of thought where he believed that the contents of the human consciousness is like a “stream”. This stream is comprised of every experience that an individual has ever had and shapes their opinion." The first sentence is ungrammatical, and the second sentence is not supported with a reference citation. Group 8 needs to carefully proofread the entire article, and make sure that the statements are valid and supported. Also correct improper punctuation, e.g., "Buddhisms idea of "Mindstream"

Other problems and examples: - The section "Stream of Consciousness" contains exact quotes that are not enclosed by quotation marks. This is plagiarism, even if the source is cited. - The Principles of Psychology - italicize and follow with a reference citation. - "James describes stream of consciousness like this in his own words" - redundant and poor grammar - Proponents - this section doesn't actually mention any proponents - "Bernard Baars has developed Global Workspace Theory which bears some resemblance to stream of consciousness.[1]" - this belongs in next section - "The current view on the stream of consciousness has been a place for debate." - another instance of poor grammar. - "Those critics of William James’s stream of consciousness, such as Susan Blackmore, is a psychologist that challenges what James thought was how the human conscious processes life experiences." - more of the same

It is not my job to proofread this article and make corrections. I have just copied out a few examples. There is a lot of good content in here that is worth publishing. However, if you cannot see the problems with the text that I have copied out, I don't think you will be able to make adequate corrections to make this piece suitable for publication. J.R. Council (talk) 02:42, 1 May 2014 (UTC)

Don't erase sandbox
Group 8 - a Wikipedia editor did not like the changes, so Gabriel and I decided to try submitting this as a new article, Stream of consciousness (William James). Once we figure out how to do this, we will submit it for review, which could take weeks or months. J.R. Council (talk) 21:26, 15 May 2014 (UTC)