User talk:Ashtonterra/sandbox

From Prof Mc: You've really done a great job of pulling together material on a challenging topic and also presenting it in a way that is appropriate for its context on Wikipedia. Because you've done such a careful job, the revisions I ask now are pretty minor: _______________________________________ — Preceding unsigned comment added by AMcClanan (talk • contribs) 22:48, 24 November 2017 (UTC)
 * change "in the West" to something more specific such as "in medieval western Europe."
 * add additional links to other Wikipedia entries from yours such as : baptistery, Naples, Jesus, and Peter
 * a mechanical fix is how to use hyphens in phrases such as fourth century, here are tips: http://grammarist.com/usage/centuries/
 * Constantine needs more info, e.g. "the Great"
 * Soter needs more info or a link
 * make sure to link your entry from the Naples Cathedral entry (and others) once you go live
 * you've done a great job of integrating images, and remember to also add a References section

Peer Review
Hello,

I think your lead section works great, I've seen different kinds and I think yours works given the following information you provide, going into detail about its history as well of an adequate description. It allows me to quickly decide if the page might be helpful to me or not or whether its actually what i'm looking for. I like how you broke down the mosaics into categories making for easier navigation and allowing for you to search quicker. The images are also good additions in case your like me, and you have never seen the inside or not familiar with this topic. I think the only thing that could possibly be improved is the history although, I know it can be difficult to get a lot of information that isn't repeating itself or seems useless. It just seems a little short and i think could use a little more information if available. Overall I do think its a good page with adequate information and even balance of verbiage with the images allowing to give a clearer picture of descriptions. I hope this has been helpful information and look forward to seeing your final draft!

--GodzillaPDX (talk) 19:43, 20 November 2017 (UTC)

Peer Review
Hi Ashton, Great job! You did thorough work and the article is very easy to read and understand. The way you broke down the topics into headings is very helpful. It's hard to think of suggestions for improvement.

1. A little clarification in the history section might be good. I had to read it a few times to get the gist of it. There are conflicting sources saying it was built either early in the fourth century or late in the fourth century?

2. Maybe add a link to earthenware. When reading that part about the piscina, I wondered what exactly is earthenware.

3. Very interesting part about the piscina not being large enough for full immersion. Was that customary at the time the Baptistery was built?

4. Another link that I think that would be useful it to the archiepiscopal palace in Naples.

5. Nice addition about where the current entrance is.

6. I enjoyed reading your article and seeing the images of the beautiful mosaics.

Jrmastor (talk) 22:09, 26 November 2017 (UTC)jrmastor

Peer Review
I really enjoyed your article. I found it particularly interesting that the orientation was different east to west than we typically see today. The only suggestion I have is that you might place a link to Christian Iconography when you discuss that the practices of it lead to the conclusions you mentioned. Rooney2pdx (talk) 07:15, 29 November 2017 (UTC)