User talk:Asimon2

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Comments from Dr. O
Be sure to add the content you are adding to the Discrimination Based on Color page to the Colorism in the Caribbean page also. This cannot be cut/paste but use the same information to contribute the content in both places. Also, review the existing content on both as they are both flagged for lack of neutrality. What could you edit to make sure these pages align with the neutrality requirement? — Preceding unsigned comment added by Mosterbur (talk • contribs) 13:40, 24 April 2017 (UTC) If you have any questions, please don't hesitate to contact me on my talk page. Adam (Wiki Ed) (talk) 22:33, 1 February 2017 (UTC)

Discrimination based on skin color
Hi! I thought I'd explain a bit as to the most likely reasons why the edits were reverted by. Looking at the content you added, the main thing that stood out was that you focused very specifically on skin bleaching as opposed to discrimination on skin color per se. Why I say "per se" is that your section focused on on skin bleaching than the issues that someone may face because of their skin color. That specific article is very general, so going into great detail about the problems with skin bleaching isn't a good fit here as it puts undue weight on the skin bleaching. There are ways to mention skin bleaching in a section, however it has to be phrased a certain way.

For example, you may want to phrase a section sort of like this:


 * In Jamaica the preference for lighter colored skin is prevalent, leading to many Jamaicans using skin whitening products, some of which are purchased through illegal roadside stands and have potentially harmful ingredients. This preference for lighter skin stems from the 17th century when the British colonized Jamaica and instituted slavery and a social hierarchy that gave people more privileges depending on the color of their skin. White people had the most privilege, while lighter skinned people and mixed people of color had more limited privileges. Negro slaves were at the bottom of the hierarchy and had little to no privileges. Slavery was abolished in 1834, however many Jamaicans still place great value on lighter colored skin, which they view as more socially acceptable. Jamaican women tend to believe that their skin color will be the determining factor as to whether or not they receive greater social benefits such as better job placements or marriage prospects.

This addresses the preoccupation with skin color in a way that mentions skin bleaching while focusing more on the general issue as to why they feel this way. I took quite a bit of this content from the colorism in the Caribbean article and rephrased it, so you can find sourcing on that article to back up the claims. You can use what I've written here, if you like. The main thing to remember is the target article you're writing in, as some content may not be as appropriate for some as others.

I also want to caution you on talking with other editors. I know that you must have been frustrated to find your content removed twice, however you need to be calm and polite with other editors. Telling them that they need to expand their horizons and research more can be seen as an WP:ADHOMINEM attack against them and is not likely to be met with a warm reception by the other editor. A better way to proceed is to politely tell them that you don't understand the reasons for the information's removal and want a more in-depth explanation. You can also ask them for some suggestions as to how to better frame or phrase the content, as many editors are willing to help out if asked nicely. The general rule of thumb is to remember the golden rule - always treat others as you would like to be treated yourself and make sure to remember that people cannot read your body posture or tone on the Internet, so people may read something as rude even if this wasn't your intent. The same goes the opposite way. Admittedly though, sometimes we all write things that are meant to be rude and come across this way, but avoid doing that in general since it doesn't really win people over as a whole. Don't always assume that someone removing content is doing so out of ill will towards you or the subject you're writing about, as in most cases it's just someone doing a routine action. If you have questions, the best place to go is either the article talk page or the user's talk page. Shalor (Wiki Ed) (talk) 18:03, 16 May 2017 (UTC)