User talk:Asircar

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Hello, Asircar, and welcome to Wikipedia! My name is Ian and I work with Wiki Education; I help support students who are editing as part of a class assignment.

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Review of Article Draft
Overall, this draft looks pretty good! I read through the actual article and your style here (like way of laying out the survey responses, etc.) matches the actual article very well. It also seems complete when compared to the other sections in the full article: it has at least as much information as the USA section, which I would expect to be the most filled out. The sources also look pretty good from a cursory glance.

One small issue I see is a little over-writing: too many connecting words and insistence on putting together complex sentences, for example when you say in the second paragraph "54% agreed that hot days had become more frequent in their local area, in comparison to 21% of respondents perceiving frequency of severe storms as having increased." It doesn't seem to me like there's really a comparison there. Those are just two different effects of climate change with different predicted frequencies and timelines, and people have correspondingly different experiences with them. This doesn't seem to really compare or contrast the two ideas, which makes it feel like it's just there to pull together the sentences. I would say just split them up! It's a Wikipedia page, it doesn't have to have complex grammar if you're just listing numbers. A little bit of work-over like that throughout the draft would make it even more in line with how the rest of the article is written as well.

Again, overall very good.Saxifragerussell (talk) 01:22, 26 October 2021 (UTC)