User talk:Asomo101/sandbox

Hmartin55 (talk) 18:36, 18 November 2020 (UTC)
 * I think your page is very easy to follow. However, I think you can add a little more content to each section (especially the beginning ones).
 * The hearing threshold: I think it would've been nice to see an explanation in addition to numbers. To a general reader, I think the numbers can be hard to follow.
 * I love how you included a study at the bottom of your page. With this being said, take time to summarize the study in your own words-- a few paragraphs!
 * Your refrence list is long and throuogh! Good job with this!!

Unfortunately, this was a current study being done and it hasn't been completed yet. The results were not reported yet. --Asomo101 (talk) 03:13, 18 December 2020 (UTC) asomo101


 * You have a good use of bullet points to get your point across in a lot of the sections, makes it easy to follow


 * Including an explanation on the threshold of hearing would be nice in relation to your injury


 * I think including a small explanation of the benefit of the treatment would be good in explaining how it actually helps

Smuq318 (talk) 03:17, 19 November 2020 (UTC)
 * Research direction could go into more detail about what the IDF study is on would be beneficial and maybe expanding on what they are trying to find

There was an explanation of the threshold. As far as the treatment goes, it can help, but once you have acoustic trauma, it can't be cured. The clinical trial is something that's being done currently so no results have been made. --Asomo101 (talk) 03:22, 18 December 2020 (UTC) asomo101

--Awarsi77 (talk) 23:15, 19 November 2020 (UTC)
 * I like how your wiki page flows very well and is easy on the eyes. You explained everything in your bullet points concisely as well. Great job!
 * In your treatment section it would be helpful you explained the therapies just slightly and how they would help. As I read the first one about oxygen treatment I am unsure of how that would help treat this condition.
 * Your pathophysiology section is great! I would try and simplify some terms for the final wiki page, as some people reading may not have a great understanding of the sciences.
 * In research directions, you can mention briefly, the findings of the research or a little more about where they are in the study so far. Overall great work!

Oxygen treatment is explained in the beginning summary (it was initially present there during the project. The clinical trial is something that's being done currently and no results have been made. --Asomo101 (talk) 03:22, 18 December 2020 (UTC) asomo101

--Sweiner02 (talk) 19:02, 25 November 2020 (UTC)
 * Would benefit for a lot more linking to other wikipedia pages.
 * Good job of consistently citing and using a variety of sources.
 * Using the already existing images of the anatomy would really help your pathophysiology section.
 * For this, making your treatment section Treatment/Prevention and addressing more in terms of prevention strategies would be helpful.
 * You should also include recent research that has found interesting things in the past 5 years. Also, a little more info on the clinical trial would be good. In addition, I bet you could find more clinical trials.

I followed through with adding prevention. unfortantely, there's not much you could do to prevent other than trying to keep the ears away from noise. I couldn't find anything other than what I found. The rest were too old of a clinical study.

--Asomo101 (talk) 03:22, 18 December 2020 (UTC) asomo101