User talk:AstroJam4/sandbox2

Hey cool article!! I liked the figures a lot and I think the topic comes through clearly overall. There are a couple weird things that I discuss below but so far good job!

Lead Section: The information is good, but the second sentence is a bit confusing so I would recommend breaking it up. I think you could also expand this section a bit more by giving more background on the chemistry definitions. Definitely expand somehow though, it is a bit short.

Structure: Overall the structure seems good. The lead needs to be longer and the Biofilms and Bacterial Anaerobic Corrosion section could also do with more text. I like the section with the chemical equations breaking up text and explaining what's going on. I think there is room for more explanations of what the chemistry means however.

Balance of Coverage: The first section (Bacterial Anaerobic Corrosion Explained) is very well covered. The next section has good technical explanations but the 'laymans' explanations could be expanded. The conclusion of this section needs something that wraps it back to 'why' or 'big picture'.

Neutral Content: One thing that makes this feel like there might not be a totally neutral approach is that some sources use "we" wording. This indicates that the writing is pulled more directly from one paper rather than from several supporting articles. It might be a source of bias because other papers are not being referenced as much or at all even though they are cited. Unclear, but possible bias.

Sources: Good sources but again, some seem to be referenced in a way that might be biased or even without paraphrasing. Be careful of plagiarism here. Overall, the articles/ references are reputable sources.