User talk:Astrodynamic/sandbox

Peer Review- Luke Tasker
"How could your peer improve the lead" - Your lead seems far too focused on the specific details of the convention. The lead should be providing a broad overview of the proceedings, not focusing on every little detail. Some of your leads content could be put in other sections. "Is the overall structure clear" - Yes the structure is clear but feels incomplete. An added section or two would be appropriate. "Is there balanced coverage of the topic? Is the tone neutral?" The coverage is balanced and neutral. There are only a few sentences so there is not much to go off for this. "Are the sources reliable" The sources appear reliable. "What proofreading or writing suggestions do you have to improve the article" Add some more information. Split it into more sections, don't go over every aspect and part of the proceedings in just one section. "What other things would you add or fix in the article" I would add a key persons section, in addition to all of the above changes I mentioned.