User talk:Atkins.ka/sandbox

Hi Kaila,

I was assigned to peer review your wiki article draft. We were suppose to use the posted rubric to assess each other's article. The listed numbers refer to the category in on the rubric.

1. I think your article is missing a lead section. Your first section does a great job summarizing what IP is;however, it doesn't go into the rest of your article. Perhaps mention the researchers that discovered this disorder and summarize it's prevalence that way, it could flow into the history of it which is your next section.

2. Your paper is well organized, using headers helps with distinguishing the topics of your article as well as navigate your page. Balance and tone were fine. Throughout your paper, I felt as if you were reporting facts regarding your topic and staying at a neutral position. In terms of content, there are a few quotes incorporated into your article. I remember reading other "Talk" pages and critics don't approve of using quotes from other sources. Consider looking to that for further confirmation.

3. References were fine. In-text links and the reference page helped organize your sources.

4. You improved upon the original article in many ways. Incorporating studies and reviews added great reliable sources to your article and filling in some knowledge gap. Some section names are the same as the original; however, the content is different. Also, you changed a lot of suggestive wording from original article to more of a neutral word choice. Just to let you know, someone replied to your post on the talk page of the original article offering feedback as well.

Bchen1100 (talk)