User talk:Atmims

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Hello, Atmims, and welcome to Wikipedia! My name is Ian and I work with Wiki Education; I help support students who are editing as part of a class assignment.

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Peer Review
Hi Alyssa,

I think you have a great draft started here! I can tell that you are still working on the article, so I am sure a lot of the suggestions I make are ones you have been planning to do, but I thought I would share my suggestions anyway.

1) I think the lead of this article is written very well from what you have so far. I think it summarizes the basic information about Alissa very well. I also think you have a nice structure; it was a good idea to break up the information into “Early life” and “Collaborations.” Additionally, think you do a great job at maintaining a neutral tone in your article.

2) I would suggest altering the structure of your article to include different-sized headings because it would make it easier for the reader to navigate through the information you provide. I also think it would be nice to incorporate an image of Alissa and/or an infobox about her life because it would help to break up the text and make the article more visually appealing. Again, I’m sure you are going to do this, but don’t forget to proofread! I noticed a few minor grammatical errors that I know you will catch, such as not putting a space between “Ashley” and “grew up” in the Early life paragraph.

3) I would say the most important thing you can do to improve your article is to find and cite more sources throughout the article. Are there any articles written about Alissa that you can cite? Citing sources throughout the article would allow the reader to know exactly where that specific piece of information came from. For example, when I was reading your article, I found myself wondering where you got the information about her poor relationship with her father. I think it would be helpful to incorporate in-text citations when you provide specific information like this.

Good work, Alyssa! I enjoyed reading your article because I have never heard of Alissa Ashley before.

Let me know if you have any questions,

Emily S