User talk:Auvaursi/sandbox1

feedback
Hi, I'm here to give you some feedback!
 * Uncited here: Lydia Flood married William Jackson. Everything else seems well-cited, though. Nicely done!
 * The later life and legacy section seems fragmented--could you find a way to combine some of these thoughts into paragraphs?
 * References should follow punctuation. Overall, you follow this rule, but I noted one exception here ...made reference to Oakland's namesake oak trees[10], where the ref is before the comma.
 * You could link to Fanny Jackson Coppin where you mention her
 * Really good job complying with the Manual of Style, overall. The language you're using is neutral and "encyclopedic" overall.
 * Does her marriage belong in a section called later life and legacy? Can you find the year of the marriage? You may need to create a personal life section. Or if she was married early in her life, it could be moved to the "early life" section.
 * I loved the factoid about the toilet creams! How interesting!

I really had to look for small problems to point out, which means you did a good job of complying with policies. Let me know if there's anything specifically you want feedback on. Otherwise, I think this is good to be moved to the mainspace article. Elysia (Wiki Ed) (talk) 21:32, 18 March 2019 (UTC)