User talk:Avelizmarjard1/sandbox

Peer review by Syeda Sultana
=== 1. The edits made were not biased, she plans on using facts and quotes to back it up rather than her own opinion. 2. The things that she wants to change/add are helpful to the article and can make it more informative to the person reading it. 3. There were not specific citations added but she did touch upon how she would fix the citations and add in more reliable ones. 4. She is using quotes from people who have survived shootings so I feel that fits the one and language. She was very clear on why she added these things in and how they could help. 5. Yes their are 3 edits but not specific ciations, she did mention she would add them in by finding specific facts for her edits. ===

Ethan: 1. The edits are mostly neutral except the included quotes you talked about from the parkland shooting shows a bias towards gun control and a controversial topic currently in the US. You can add the direct quotes, but anything else in response to the quotes could be considered controversial. 2. These are sufficient changes and is a good addition especially adding the most recent events, and the current actions in response to school shootings ,etc 3. You talked about using news articles as your citations which are good sources 4. It is clear what you want to add into the article 5. There are 3 edits. You seem to be adding a lot of facts to as why gun control is good which is a little biased, maybe you could also add in other facts to support the opposite view just so other editors or readers won't interpret it as biased. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Shortsandflipflopsguy(Ethan) (talk • contribs) 18:32, 30 April 2018 (UTC)

peer review response
All of this advice was very useful to me because I never thought about adding in specific examples from the opposing side so the reader wouldn't think I am being biased just so they will get an understanding of the overall topic and what different people seem to think about it. (why there should or should not be gun control in the United States), I will definitely just include the specific quotes from the survivors but I will not add my own personal input in because what I think does not have anything to do with the topic. I have included the exact websites I will be using in my talk page but before actually adding them to wikipedia I will have to properly cite all of my sources. I will also add some examples and sources from the opposing side so it doesn't seem like I am trying to persuade the readers into thinking that gun control is definitely what we need in the United States. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Avelizmarjard1 (talk • contribs) 18:43, 30 April 2018 (UTC)