User talk:Awhite07/sandbox

Great overall start Asiah, maybe add a little bit more information to introduce your topic. Also this sentence, "In their work, they undermine thinking deemed as the norm through identifying contradictions within the system and referencing psychoanalytic theory." needs a little bit of clarification. Carlapicasso (talk) 16:43, 6 April 2019 (UTC)

i feel like you should define what a post-modern world is Ddurandisse (talk) 19:17, 31 March 2019 (UTC) Dayla I think this is a great start but could use more sources to beef up and further provide evidence for the topic, I left some hyperlinks in the bibliography of different sources I have found so far.Sophieb905 (talk) 23:32, 31 March 2019 (UTC)

Rapidrider Peer Review
Please include links to the article as well as an indication as to which subsection/ subheading you are working on. There are two solid paragraphs of content that appear to pertain to the Lead section although there are no links to other Wikipedia articles in the writing at the time of writing this peer review. Source citations are pretty good although they must always come at the end of a sentence regardless of the location of cited information in the phrase. Also, be sure to add in the necessary access dates and url if you found the source online, regardless if it is a published book or not.

I'd like to know where the stated goal of postmodern femenism is located because the last sentence in the first paragraph has no citation although it needs one if you are going to make this type of claim. This sentence might need some edits "Postmodern philosophers, Jacques Lacan and Jacques Derrida have a significant role in the commencement of the thought," because the current phrase doesn't make sense. But don't change it to "have had" or another passive voice type sentence. I don't understand this sentence: "In their work, they undermine thinking deemed as the norm through identifying contradictions within the system and referencing psychoanalytic theory." Who is they? Why are these people important? Are their works widely circulated? Why is the postmodern femenist theory deserve a Wikipedia page in the first place? Significance?

LINKS to other femenist leaders are important too, even if they don't have pages yet.

Hopefully my comments are helpful.

Regards, Rapidrider (talk) 13:16, 3 April 2019 (UTC)

Hey,

I think your work is a good start. However, a lot of the stuff is vague and it would be good if you can clarify. Like comments above, add links and more information to give a background information and knowledge to those who are reading your page. You should clearly define all of the terms. Robertpark1999 (talk) 14:08, 3 April 2019 (UTC)robertpark1999

Hi! Great start so far! I liked the image used and the start of your page. Don't forget to add different words that are linked to websites to give more incite to the reader. For example, you can do it for postmodernism and feminism. Also, for the amount of text you have, you should cite a couple more sources. Lastly, maybe try to find a synonym for "Postmodernism" because it is repeated a lot. Otherwise, it looks really good and keep on going! Miaeschlidt (talk) 16:18, 3 April 2019 (UTC)

Good start so far. I would definitely link other pages to some of the topics that you have in your work. It seems as if you could benefit from maybe another source for more information. A few grammatical errors regarding commas, but other than that it looks very good!Henrykuv (talk) 16:54, 3 April 2019 (UTC)

This is really good so far. I would try explaining what post modern feminism is before you say that it is a merge between two different things. Cbettica65 (talk) 18:17, 3 April 2019 (UTC)

don't forget headers/to explain where this is going in the article and to link the article you are editing. You could also link the people mentioned such as "Jaques Lacan and Jacques Derrida" and others if they have pages so readers can see who they are. Oliviaohearn (talk) 02:11, 4 April 2019 (UTC)

Maybe explain exactly how Jacques Lacan and Jacques Derrida sparked the creation of postmodern feminism. Also, it may help to define postmodernism so the connection to feminism is clear. Fields18x (talk) 04:45, 4 April 2019 (UTC)

Good job but make sure your citations are completely accurate and arent missing any fields, also be sure to link some key words to help link your article to others. Casey518 (talk) 00:02, 6 April 2019 (UTC)Casey O'Connor

I liked this summary of post modern feminism. I found out the information to be intriguing and enlightening. Additionally, I enjoyed the use of a picture current feminist. Benitalukose (talk) 03:20, 6 April 2019 (UTC) Benita Lukose

Good job! I think it would look nicer if you were to add some pictures and headings. Bokyung0327 (talk) 02:01, 8 April 2019 (UTC)