User talk:Ayalah Gittler

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Hello, Ayalah Gittler, and welcome to Wikipedia! My name is Shalor and I work with Wiki Education; I help support students who are editing as part of a class assignment.

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Technological singularity
Hi - I have some notes on the content you added to the article:


 * Wikipedia is written in neutral third person. As such, avoid using "we", "you", or "I".
 * This is written in a fairly casual tone as well, which makes this seem like it's more of an essay responding to the topic and building our own conclusions based on the sourcing, as opposed to only summarizing what has been explicitly stated in the source material. This has many phrases that come across as original research, such as " Intelligence explosion isn’t a matter of if but rather of when."
 * With edits, it's better to make many smaller edits when adding content than one large change.

I hope this help! Shalor (Wiki Ed) (talk) 13:19, 2 April 2020 (UTC)

Thank you for your input! I appreciate the help, I'm trying to expand that section in the article. I am editing it to be more neutral third person and try to reference the authors more in regards to their articles. (Ayalah Gittler (talk) 08:47, 9 April 2020 (UTC))

Your recent edit was fine from the standards of a journal article, but for a Wikipedia article a lot of the material didn't meet Wikipedia-specific rules about sourcing. Feel free to open a discussion on Talk:Technological singularity if you have any questions or want a second opinion. Rolf H Nelson (talk) 03:19, 1 May 2020 (UTC)