User talk:Azaciel/sandbox

This article brings up an interesting topic that has not been talked about much. After reading the article, here are some reviews that I would like to share:

In the introduction part, it clearly explained the meaning of the article subject, but it did not introduce the whole article in a way that there is no summary about what you are going to talk about in the article. I think it would be better to put a little summary about the article after the explanation of ‘The Alternative Project’.

The structure of the article, heading, and subheading, are well organized and help the audience to understand the article easier. The number of details in the article is also enough to make the audience understand the subject. The information on the background part is already incisive, but the other part of the article needs much more descriptions of each part to help readers understand the subject even more. Apart from that, I would recommend you to put some images regarding the topic to deepen the readers’ understanding. It’s also nice to add some bridging on every shift to new subheadings to help the readers’ reading flow. There is also one typo written in the sentence in the background section: “Unfortunately, the pandemic started and the in-person conference was canceled and replaced instead. is a small virtual conference held.”

Every statement in this article has been provided with diverse and high-quality references but since there is no specific country stated in the article, I cannot know if the references are from the country chosen. This article also provides wikilinks that help me as a reader to seek further reading. The links for the links are also curated well and are easy to find.

Response To Peer Review:

Thank you for the review. I will address some of the review and my plan to fix or add on the article based on the review.

1.Summary and references on the background. I notice the lack of summary in my background. So my plan to added it is to finish all of the article first and then take the important point of all the article heading and sub-heading, and make it a summary that are cohesive, informative, and covers all the topics that will be discussed in the article.

2.Developing and describe the sub-heading. I will add more information on the sub-heading section after doing some more research, so that there is no wrong information conveyed. And also I will add a few words or sentences to bridge the gap in between part so as to create a smooth and cohesive reading flow.

3.Adding image. In the draft article, I didn’t add images, because I’m still considering which images that can add more information to the audience. But I will add an images in this article.

4.Typo and specific country references. My plan to fix this is to remove the typo part. And for the references issue, because this topic is a global issue, and not a specific country issue, so most of the references I used are a global references. But there are some references that based on specific country, for that I will add the name of the country being discussed in the sentences, if there is a sentence that I will paraphrase. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Azaciel (talk • contribs) 12:29, 6 December 2021 (UTC)