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Peer Review

I really enjoyed reading about David Salle however I wish I knew more about his background information: like where he went to school, does he have a family, where he grew up, and more personal information like that, it doesn't need to be a lot but I think that that is important when reading about artists. One thing that I really liked was how you explain some of the exhibitions that Salle has been apart of. I'm not sure if this was done purposefully but in the "work" section, second paragraph, there are two sentences that are repeated from the very beginning and it stuck out to the me in this paragraph because they are so close together so I would take one of them out. The article seems to be unbiased which is very helpful to the reader as well. There are some instances where a reference could be used like with the quote in the "work" section and in the "collections" section too; because that it something that would have to be referenced unless you personally visited every single one of those locations. All in all I like the flow of this article and how unbiased it seems! Maybe just think about adding some photos of his work, some background information on him, and maybe elaborating on the different media and processes that Salle uses. Great job and I can't wait to see where the article ends up!! Megan keim (talk) 02:05, 21 March 2019 (UTC)

Aishatu's Peer Review for David Salle
I think this article does a good job of keeping a neutral tone. I like how neatly his educational information and use of different mediums and process is summed up. I do think that the article would benefit from more information about his life. For example, explaining what he studied at school or a brief summary of who John Baldessari was. Specifically mentioning John Baldessari as Salle’s mentor indicates that he had a big impact on Salle or that he was a big deal, you must explain why. I also think that the more could be said about Salle’s work. It might be a good idea to take a couple of Salle’s work’s and explain them in detail in the article to give the reader a better idea of his process and subject matter. I think that the article so far is a great start, you guys only need more content. I also think that adding a collections page was a great idea! — Preceding unsigned comment added by AishatuSaid (talk • contribs) 19:22, 31 March 2019 (UTC)