User talk:BSII0IX/sandbox

https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Talk:School_strike_for_climate BSII0IX (talk) 21:11, 4 February 2019 (UTC)

Possible articles to work on
https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/School_strike_for_climate I'd like to update the section that talks about the school strikes in Germany and how the movement of school strikes started.

https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Zero_waste I'd like to add a paragraph to the Zero Waste article about Berkeley's "Zero Waste 2020" project.

https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Lid I'd like to add a paragraph about how the lids of paper cups impact the environment. BSII0IX (talk) 03:36, 13 February 2019 (UTC)

Peer Review 3 Articles
Hashtag Activism The first two sentences of your lead section are very good and summarize the most important information of your topic.

I’d rephrase the third sentence because it sounds confusing and leaves too much room for interpretation and you just make assumptions by saying “The point of hashtag activism arguably to share certain issues with one's friends and followers in the hopes that they will also share the same information.” Why do they have to share the same information? Your sentence later on is way stronger: “hashtags have also been used to debate and make people aware of social and political issues.” I’d also rephrase that it “leads to a discussion.” Your second half of this paragraph is way stronger and includes the information needed to describe the impact and goal of hashtag activism. If you want to keep it just put it at the end after you describes hashtag activism a bit more. The structure of your wikipedia page looks very good and has a good balance. You’re doing a good job at paying equal attention to all subtopics what makes it very neutral and allows the reader to build their own opinion without being pushed towards one direction. posted on: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User_talk:Erikay677/sandbox#BSII0IX's_Peer_Review

Him Too Movement Your lead section is very good because it states the most important information and gives a good overview about what the article is about.

I’d expand the section about its history because you basically just repeat what you say in the lead section. correct the spelling in the media coverage section. It’s “hashtag” and not “hash tag” The section on its media coverage brings in very good background that also makes it easier to understand the impact of the movement.

Maybe consider putting the last and the second to last paragraph together since it is about the same case and it would make is easier for the reader to understand it. Iy you can come up with more example where the hashtag was used the better. Add a link to the #MeToo movement in the “See also” section posted on: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User_talk:Ixz/sandbox#BSII0IX's_Peer_Review

U.S. national anthem protests (2016-present): Your lead section is very good because it is easy to understand and it is very neutral since you state all views and different perspectives on the movement. It is very good how you first summarize the intention of the protest, then you give a short summary of the background and its history and you state the biggest event that occurred related to the protest and that the protest is best known for.

Double check the second paragraph of your “Background” section. Is it actually related to the protest and needed to understand the background of the protest? You include a lot of quotations in the “Background” section. Be careful not to quote too much since it is supposed to a an article about the protest and not a summary of news media. Your section about “Causes” doesn’t really address the causes of the protest it rather talks about Kaepernick’s intention and why he refused to stand up. It is very helpful how you split up the section on “NFL protest” because it allows the reader to get a better overview of how the protest evolved and can be used as a timeline. Also your connection to other sports and institutions is very good. It shows the impact of the protest and how it spread to other sports and in the society n general. Good job!! posted on: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User_talk:Marquez94n/sandbox#BSII0IX's_Peer_Review

BSII0IX (talk) 21:11, 20 March 2019 (UTC)

Continue improving your article
"The People's Climate Movement Organization started in 2014 with the Peoples Climate March in New York and the National Day of Action in 2015. These two events build the foundation of the organization and since then they are organizing climate events around the world [1]."

I added the paragraph above to the page of the People's Climate Movement Organization in the section about its founding.

I'd also like to change the title of our article from People's Climate Movement to People's Climate Movement Organization to avoid confusion and to make clear that it is about the organization and not about a specific movement. BSII0IX (talk) 19:23, 10 April 2019 (UTC)