User talk:BValerio/sandbox

peer review commentary
Great length and helpful information- we're supposed to keep the information neutral and unbiased so maybe phrase some of it as more of a fact by erasing "critics say" and just state the fact.

Peer Review
Aflores6 (talk) 18:12, 12 April 2017 (UTC) Awesome information. This looks great!

Wiki Draft Comments
1. "simple compositional style of both types" both types of what? clarify

2. first two sentences are floating on their own as underdeveloped paragraphs

3. "Though it bears the moniker of a salsa, salsa romántica is considered by most to be inauthentic to the true spirit and style of salsa music." change most to some. explain why many consider it inauthentic. can you reword so you don't have "salsa" in sentence 3x

4. explain roots of this - "In Cuba, some critics refer to it as the “white” style to differentiate between salsa romántica and traditional salsa."

5. grammar - "Critics have also focused on the fact that "true salsa," comprised of qualified musicianship alongside the intricate composition, while salsa romántica was too lyrically syrupy and musically systematic. " Some critics believe that "true salsa" is comprised of ....

6. Needs citation; and can you be more specific...who says this? "Some say that one of the reasons salsa romántica even came about was due to the cocaine cartel’s affinity for it."

7. explain link between dancing and cartels: " Dancing was still encouraged, but researchers claim that the dancing of this time period began to dwindle creatively and became much less interesting to watch." this may also be a problem for neutrality. can you be more specific about who?

8. when?? "Though many critique this style, it was incredibly popular during this time and played on most popular radio stations."

Melaniehuska (talk) 00:45, 17 April 2017 (UTC)