User talk:Bae rowshay11/sandbox

Bae rowshay 11

This is a great start! You give a clear idea about what direction you'll be moving towards. If possible, maybe you can throw some statistics in there some where? Don't forget your 3 secondary sources and 1 primary source, and don't forget to cite your sources using the "cite" button after quotes and sentences. You can also take out and add stuff to the Religion and Social sections, if they aren't backed up by sources. If the writing is not up to scholarly standards you can change the structure to make it read smoother. Are there different types of religion during the Greek and Roman times? What would happen if they didn't abide by that religion? Religious wars? Maybe you could throw in what kind of religious views Spartans had?

It looks like you have a lot of work to do explaining and synthesizing you're main areas of interest, Religion a & Social Structure. 300-500 words.

Balance your tone correctly and make sure you keep your writing as succinct as possible.

Geisinsj7254 (talk) 23:35, 11 November 2019 (UTC)

Peer #2 Good start! Your topic seems like a good choice from the clear lack of info on the original page. Maybe talk a little more about the the different city states relations with women in their society, and how that changed over time if it really did. Try and flush out more what you want in the different sections with more detail. As the previous peer reviewer said citations just need to be incorporated after that good work and keep going. Ztluce (talk) 17:38, 13 November 2019 (UTC)