User talk:Baho27

Hello, Well done adding descriptions of works. See the following questions/ edits below on the Zorio page:

GENERAL INTRO: (1) "There Zorio presented Torcia, a radical piece where flaming torches, suspended above the ground, fall causing the collapse and destruction of the work itself. In 1969 he also exhibited in Paris for the first time, and New York for the event "Nine at Castelli" where, with Giovanni Anselmo, they were the only European artists, faced with artists of Process Art, Antiform and Post-minimal artists.[2] By 1984, Zorio had started another series utilizing a primeval form, that of the canoe, which he made from assorted materials such as pitch or steel. The canoe, along with the star and javelin, became a recurrent motif in Zorio’s oeuvre.[3]" - Note how many commas you've used in these couple of sentences, not all of which are grammatically necessary. This also seems to occur in a couple places in descriptions of Zorio's work. Perhaps revise to allow the sentence structures to flow more smoothly Vsmoon (talk) 04:29, 4 April 2013 (UTC)

"incandescent electric light tubes, steel, pitch, motifs, and processes ": some of these are not materials. Maybe rephrase. Also, you could include other materials significantly used by Zorio, like fire, cloth, salt, wood/bamboo branches, asbestos, magnets, ropes, and lead, among others. Why is it important to notice that Zorio uses non-traditional art materials? PollonApollo (talk) 15:18, 5 April 2013 (UTC)

"Odio", which you rightly translate as "Hate", is not only " inscribed with an ax in a wall". There are other pieces by Zorio that incorporate this word with different processes and materials. See Christov-Bakargiev, Carolyn. Arte Povera. London: Phaidon, 1999, p. 172. PollonApollo (talk) 15:22, 5 April 2013 (UTC)

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