User talk:BaileyArthur475/sandbox/StratifiedReproduction

12/6 Goals
Further define stratified reproduction in more holistic terms including more emphasis on race and sexuality. Re structure the article to make it flow better in order to further the concepts of stratified reproduction. Lastly focus on the systematic issues involved in stratified reproduction.

Peer Review Response
Overall, I agree with many of the suggestions that the peer reviews state. Reformatting this article once all the research is collected is pivotal in the editing process. Further breaking down the racial implications section into how stratified reproduction has and does affect each group differs. Furthering the sections on Queer stratified reproduction will also help expand the nature and meaning of stratified reproduction. I think the biggest take away is the we have to rework how stratified reproduction is introduced and explained in order to give it a more holistic meaning. — Preceding unsigned comment added by BaileyArthur475 (talk • contribs) 00:34, 14 November 2018 (UTC)

BaileyArthur475 peer review
I really enjoyed reading your article! I think you can divide your first paragraph ("Ethnicity and race also play a...") in two and elaborate on your introduction. It may be a little too much to bring specific data and articles in your introduction. Also, a few of your sentences could be combined into one so your paragraphs flow smoothly. I think it's really useful that you have all your sources in one place. Ingridxreyes (talk) 22:32, 7 November 2018 (UTC)

Vanessa's Peer Review
You have produced and researched such great information for your wiki article. I would like to point out that perhaps at the beginning of the article an introductory paragraph about/or the definition of "stratified reproduction" would help the article flow. In addition, your subtitles are appropriately named, however producing more headings and subheadings would allow for the information to be divided in the appropriate sections and for the page to flow smoothly. Overall, great work. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Vaniest05 (talk • contribs) 07:37, 8 November 2018 (UTC)

Larissa's Peer Review
I really enjoyed reading what you have so far in your article. You clearly have a lot of solid information on the subject and it looks like you have even more sources to pull information from. I like the way you have organized everything so far, however I think you might be able to split up the "Racial Implications" section into more specific sections. This usually helps Wikipedia readers find exactly what they are looking for. Otherwise, everything looks great! I may consider using some of your organization techniques in my own article editing!

Lhoy18 (talk) 23:52, 8 November 2018 (UTC)

Michelle's Peer Review
This article is really interesting and have great sources. I really am intrigued to see how the Queer Reproduction Stratification section goes, as this is something not heavily talked about. I agree with Larissa's comment about breaking up the "Racial Implications" section. Maybe separate into categories of race such as Hispanic, African American, etc. Maybe include some images or visuals for the page. Overall, I look forward to seeing the next edition!

Mausman22 (talk) 06:41, 9 November 2018 (UTC)