User talk:Barranquilla tequila

Review of your contributions
Hey! Here are some points I thought of when reading over your contributions:


 * Grammar needs work in some areas (for ex: missing words like “the” and “a”, mixing up of her and him interchangeably, improper verb tenses)
 * I think there’s too many procedural details given on the Qiubai case that overshadows why the case is important in the context of LGBT rights in China; maybe the details of the procedural points could be shortened or skimmed over and more focus could be given on context.
 * Maybe there could be more context added to the point of the Shanghai Pride Festival being cancelled and the addition follow up information from the year 2020 (for instance, was it cancelled because of COVID? Have they held the festival since then?)
 * I think the example of the censorship from the show Friends is super interesting; maybe could elaborate if this is a common occurrence for western shows with same-sex plot lines to be censored? Are there other examples? How does this compare to shows produced in China?

Ciara.567 (talk) 16:29, 28 March 2023 (UTC)