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I am evaluating "Air Pollution in India." The link is: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Air_pollution_in_India As I started reading this article, the first paragraph seemed quite jumbled to me. There were not very good transitions between ideas, even if this was meant to be an overall summary or thesis for the article. The ideas went from the major sources of air pollution, to comparing greenhouse gases with China, to facts about lung function of Indians. Also, there are some overall grammatical errors. For example, there is a sentence that says, "This fuel is inefficient source of energy, its burning releases high levels of smoke..." The sentences do not flow and a word is missing to make it a correct full sentence. This article mainly needs to be proofread for small mistakes and better transitions.

link to page
https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Clark_Montessori_High_School — Preceding unsigned comment added by Bartscol (talk • contribs) 16:58, 8 October 2018 (UTC) The page I have decided to edit is a page on the high school, Clark Montessori. This page is just very empty and should be organized better. I have noticed that most Wiki articles have a layout with organized subtitles, so that is one of the edits I plan on making. I want to fill in some more information about intercessions that high schoolers participate in, as well as the Andros trip that every 8th grader goes on for 10 days to study marine life. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Bartscol (talk • contribs) 21:39, 9 October 2018 (UTC)

Citations for Clark Montessori
About Clark Montessori High School https://clark.cps-k12.org/ (this is the school's website that has various topics and information). Clark Montessori High School. US News. (shows statistics of clark) Clark Montessori High School Curriculum. https://clark.cps-k12.org/academics/high-school — Preceding unsigned comment added by Bartscol (talk • contribs) 15:56, 16 October 2018 (UTC)

edits to clark montessori page
citation for statement that clark montessori is the first public montessori school: https://eric.ed.gov/?q=clark+montessori&id=EJ1183086 include information about senior project. delete bias attitude and make it more neutral. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Bartscol (talk • contribs) 02:37, 24 October 2018 (UTC)

Clark Montessori Draft
Peter H. Clark Montessori Junior High and High School, usually referred to as Clark Montessori, is a junior and senior high school in Cincinnati, Ohio, United States. The school has around 700 students as of January 2018. Its location is in the Hyde Park–area woods, on the former estate of Ohio Governor Myers Y. Cooper(1929–1931), with trails in its "backyard".[3] Recently completed in these woods is a small, ancient-Greek–style amphitheatre. The school had been located in its temporary home in Winton Terrace from the 2007/2008 school year until the 2011/2012 School year. However, Clark has been back into its permanent home on Erie Avenue, since 2012. Clark is a part of the Cincinnati Public Schools. Founded in 1994 as a seventh-grade extension of existing district Montessori elementary schools, Clark expanded with its first class to become a full junior and senior high school by the 1999–2000 school year, making it the first public Montessori high school in the United States. (source added for this fact in references) Despite having no entrance exam, 99.5% of Clark seniors have graduated and 96.5% of graduates attended post-secondary education. Additionally, Clark is racially and socio-economically diverse—30-51% of students are in their family’s first generation to attend college, and 33% receive free/reduced lunch. Each student must complete over 200 community service hours in order to receive a Clark diploma. These hours may be completed with any government recognized non-profit organization and previous stewardship projects include working with the Ohio State School for the Blind and Habitat for Humanity. Four years of core classes at the honors level are required. Each student also must complete a 20-40 page thesis during their senior year. This project, known as the Senior Project, allows students to develop time-management skills, research a topic of choice with a qualified mentor, and utilize a university library. Many seniors take advantage of Saturday morning and after school help sessions hosted by senior team teachers in order to complete their senior project and stay caught up in other classes. All of the core teachers at Clark are expected to host at least one "help night" a week where struggling students can get one to one attention and improve their understanding of the subject. In the four years of high school, students participate in eight extensive, academically rigorous two-week (ten-day) field studies referred to as intersessions. All freshman must complete an introduction to high school intersession in the fall of their ninth grade year, while all sophomores complete community service; juniors look at post secondary options, and seniors go on job internships. In the spring, all students choice an intersession. Some of the choices for the spring intersession include: Appalachian trail, travels to Morocco, Spain, Costa Rica, and the Philippines, community service with Habitat for Humanity, Cincinnati History, film production, life on a farm, improvements to school's environment, and meditation. Delete the following: Each year the spring intersession options change and financial aid is offered. An important aspect that outlines Clark Montessori’s curriculum is senior project. In order to graduate, each senior is required to complete a yearlong research project based on a question of their choice. This project entails a research paper, a physical product based off the students’ papers, and a detailed presentation and speech prepared for “senior project night” at the end of the year. This project’s purpose is to expand learning horizons for students, help prepare students for long-term papers in post-secondary school etc., and improve on speech and presentation skills. Students and families, carefully guided through the college process, also receive individual support with the financial aid process. There is a college mentor for each the junior and senior class, of about one hundred students. Delete the following: Overall, student-led education unites parents, students, and teachers into an extraordinary support system. We learn, achieve, and thrive together. The school has been given a rating of "effective" by Cincinnati Public Schools, but has been given many higher honors by education magazines and was in the top three school selected in Barack Obama's 2010 Race to the Top. References[edit] 1.	^ Jump up to:a b c d e OHSAA. "Ohio High School Athletic Association member directory". Archived from the original on 2010-11-04. Retrieved 2010-02-17. 2.	Jump up^ "Clark Montessori High School". National Center for Education Statistics. Retrieved February 16, 2018. 3.	Jump up^ Clark Montessori (2007-01-15). "About Clark". Archived from the original on 2007-09-27. Retrieved 2007-08-10. 4.	Woodring, Dean, et al. “High School Frameworks at Clark Montessori.” NAMTA Journal, North American Montessori Teachers' Association. External links[edit] •	Official website •	Greatschools.net profile •	https://eric.ed.gov/?q=clark+montessori&id=EJ1183086