User talk:Bautis35/sandbox

This is where the peer review feedback for Bautis35's sandbox draft content should be posted. Be sure to sign your post and complete the Canvas quiz to receive credit for your work. UWM.AP.Endo (talk) 15:24, 16 November 2020 (UTC)

Luz Areli Peer Review
Is the content written in a neutral, unbiased tone? No, You suggest that the medication could be a "good" alternative. To be unbiased I would say they can be used as an alternative.

Do the citations follow the MEDRS (Links to an external site.) (medicine, reliable sources) guidelines? Both are reviews but since they are on medications it should be good but I would make sure that they are not primaries. From what I saw they are on other studies so it should be within guidelines.

Are the citations formatted correctly? Yes, citations are in correct formatting.

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Does it make sense to add this new content to the proposed article? It does make sense to add under the treatment section although I wouldn't use the last sentence to avoid talking about medication.

Are there any other areas of the main article that your classmate could contribute to? I believe if you want to avoid using medication and possibly having trouble finding sources you can add under the Diagnosis section as it is quite empty.

LuzAreliContreras (talk) 23:22, 22 November 2020 (UTC)

Is the content written in a neutral, unbiased tone? The tone is neutral and unbiased, but I agree with Luz that the medication sentence may be able to be reorganized/more specified to reduce the potential for a biased sentence. I think if the medications are specified and their effects described, with no opinion given, it would be just fine.

Do the citations follow the MEDRS (Links to an external site.) (medicine, reliable sources) guidelines? Yes.

Are the citations formatted correctly? Yes.

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Does it make sense to add this new content to the proposed article? Yes, it would help to enhance the treatment section.

Are there any other areas of the main article that your classmate could contribute to? The Diagnosis section is missing a citation and the diagnosis process overall could be expanded upon.

Pdietry (talk) 05:58, 23 November 2020 (UTC)