User talk:Bchen1100/sandbox

Peer Review: Kaila Atkins

Intro/lead section:

I would start with a definition of what cupping therapy is. Does a good job summarizing all major points in the article All of the info presented is also present in the body of the article

Article:

Don’t forget that the format for headings- titles on Wiki are to capitalize the first letter of the first word, and all other words in the title/headings are not capitalized. Example- Fire cupping, Wet cupping.

I would try to add more links to other articles for the reader to be directed to other related readings. Possible links: Qi, placebo effect, the various countries you named, links to the research articles.

Incorporating a Further reading section could be a useful way to elongate your article, and would be a helpful addition to the hyperlinks.

1. I would suggest starting the body of the article with a history section With the first heading being – History- then you can have sub sections for the ancient cupping therapy methods

2. After History, I would suggest you have a sub heading for Methods

3. Under the sub heading of Methods I would make 2nd-sub headings - Fire cupping and Wet cupping

4. Effectiveness against diseases: I would suggest re-naming this section to Research.

This section needs to be broken up more. It is very long, especially in comparison to the other sections in the article. One way you could break it up is adding sup sections. You can maybe start with a Research section (a paragraph summarizing or leading into the sub sections under this heading). You can have sub headings of different studied that have looked at cupping therapy. You can incorporate the ‘Future studies’ section you have under the Research heading. Under the subheadings you have for Research, you can have an Efficiency heading. Under that you can have a section- Diseases, Athletes, and then Placebo effect.

5. I would start by clearly defining what the Placebo effect is.

6. Make use the tense (past, present, future) makes sense and stays consistent throughout the section/specific subject areas being discussed.

7. Possibly add a Criticism section or subsection to show the various perspectives on this form of treatment.

8. Images of cupping therapy would be a nice addition

9. Make sure the tone stays neutral throughput all of the sections

10. Try to add more sources throughout the article. More is always better, even if the same source is repeated more than others.

11. Needs a References section for all the sources used throughout the article

Overall, great start! It's a really interesting topic, and I enjoyed learning more about it. Let me know if you have any questions, or if any of my notes were confusing/unclear. Good luck! Atkins.ka (talk) 20:33, 15 June 2018 (UTC)Atkins.ka