User talk:Bearkl/sandbox

Peer review can be found at the following google doc: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1aLRQgZpKnkrr2Hdx__n6GZ150oAM7pF69KtGgDSyIzQ/edit#

Renata Peer Review: https://docs.google.com/document/d/15n6nkfyCGr0QVP1dPcsDO8g5L96m6SRQtCsVZxWua6E/edit?usp=sharing — Preceding unsigned comment added by Sakare2000 (talk • contribs) 04:40, 28 November 2019 (UTC)

Review based on the feedback I have received: A) A lot of my feedback was helpful line review that helped me to clarify what I was saying. They also commented on using more neutral language. Both said it was a useful addition to the article. Both commented that the very first section needs to be changed a bit for flow.

B) I have gone back in and looked at the language I used and changed anything I thought was biased or showed any bias. I have also changed the first paragraph, but I am unsure if I should even keep it as part of the article. I have also made most of the line edit suggestions that they made. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Bearkl (talk • contribs) 18:09, 3 December 2019 (UTC)